Eep! My amazing mentee, Kalie, placed second in TeenPit this year! Check out her pitch and first 250 words of her novel in the full post! So proud of this amazing young writer!!!
I’m gonna start this off totally upfront. I was a mentee in Pitch Wars ’14 and ’15. I’m now a mentor in that same contest, and TeenPit. I was in a buttload of other contests (I forget most, but Googling can bring them up if you want to spend some time stalking around). And, despite all that, I got my agent through traditional querying.
Contests are amazing. I had little by the way of a writing community when I was introduced to the world of Twitter and internet writing contests. I’d never had real deadlines to work under before. The goals I’ve made and lessons I’ve learned are priceless. And that community? I wouldn’t be writing today without it. I wholeheartedly encourage all my writing friends to enter them.
But also, I know a lot of people who have been completely destroyed from them.
They either didn’t get in, or they did get in and they had a bad experience, or they got in but didn’t get an agent, or so many other things. And I get it. No one’s aren’t wrong to feel that way. I’ve been at the bottom of that pit, and it is dark and lonely and awful.
A vast majority of writers I know are rep’d through traditional querying. (And I know a lot of authors from having been involved in so many contests and competitions and forums for over seven years.) Like I said, even I caught my agent’s attention through traditional querying, and before she signed with me I did an revise and resubmit. Which was amazing and made my story immensely better, even after I’d been in Pitch Wars twice. No contest is the end all, be all. There’s so much more to learn, and infinite room to grow no matter if you’ve been in a contest or not.
Please don’t let any contest keep you from writing if it’s what you love. You aren’t a failure if you don’t get into a contest. You’re not a failure if you do get into a contest and don’t requests or representation from it it. You’re not a failure if you got an agent from a contest but still haven’t sold your book.
You wrote a book.
Tell me how many people you know in your personal life who have accomplished writing a novel. There’s probably not a ton. Most people will never understand enough about publishing and editing and revising to get it to the point you do. And the online community you build is the most important part of these contests, but it can be exhausting with mostly good news all the time. Because, yes you’re happy for them, but you feel like you’ll never have your turn.
Please keep writing. Keep querying. Keep listening and learning. Take breaks and don’t worry about them, we all need them from both writing and/or social media. The odds of getting into a large contest are slimmer than getting a request querying an agent, nowadays. The odds of getting rep’d through a contest are then even tinier. It’s not even a guarantee to get rep’d! I could have entered another Pitch Wars with how long it took for me to sign with my agent. (Well, I was rep’d for about three months after my first PW, but that’s a long story that did not end well and made everything worse.)
Getting an agent, getting a book deal, getting into contest, it’s all like winning the lottery. For the most part, it’s luck. You can’t know if the judge or mentor you submitted to hates a small trope in your book; you can’t know if the agent was having a bad day; you can’t know if the editor you went on submission to just bought a similar book the day before. But it’s not all luck. The fact that you’ve come so far, that you’re reading this post, that you’re investing so much time in your craft, means you’re increasing your odds.
It’s okay to still pursue your dream even if you didn’t win the lottery this time. The only thing it costs you to try again is time (and, let’s be real, emotional perseverance). Like I said, contests are amazing in how they teach you so much, and that community is what pulled me through some of the worst of my dark times. You should keep entering.
But this is not your end all and be all. Your words are more important than a contest.
You are more important.
I’m sorry this line of work is so rough. But you’re awesome for coming so far.
If you want to share/ramble/word vomit your story, both my ears are open for you in the comments or elsewhere (I get that sometimes talking it out helps). If you want to add on encouragement for anyone who needs it, totally feel free to leave some of those, too.
(I also apologize for the sheer amount of italics in this post. And how messy it is. I have emotions about this.)
Hello Pitch Wars hopefuls! Before you go browsing for my genre: I’m already working with my lovely mentee from TeenPit, so I will not be accepting slush in PW 2017. (Though perhaps you might find a piece of the scavenger hunt here!) I’ll also be hopping around the hashtag, and am more than happy to answer Pitch Wars questions! I was a mentee in 2014, 2015, and was in quite a few other contests, so I’ve been around the block. (Evidence here.) If you have any questions you don’t quite want to ask a mentor you might sub, or anything for a veteran to answer, hit me up here, on Twitter, anywhere.
I’ve been a writer for many years, written too many books, and way too many short stories. I work primarily in fantasy, mostly of the YA variety. Give me dragons and diversity any day of the week! My two favorite authors (who can ever pick one?) are Laini Taylor and Diana Wynne Jones, and you’ll find a lot of their influence in my work. As I mentioned above, I’ve been through the wringer with contests and agents and writing in general, so it’s still a little surreal to say I’m agented by my amazing agent, Samantha Wekstein of Writers House, and that I have a graphic novel out, Sacrifices of Shadow. Having come so far, being able to give back to the community as a mentor is living the dream! Especially my experience as a mentor in TeenPit, and getting to continue mentoring Sophia into PW. If you’re curious about her novel, here’s the pitch from her entry, a YA fantasy:
Scout enrolls in demon hunting school for one reason: to destroy the devil that killed her. But her second life is cursed. Part of the devil is inside her, keeping her alive, and it wants to wreak havoc. To save the world – and her new love – Scout must destroy the devil, but if it dies, so will she.
Sophia’s a Vietnamese American writer who was adopted when she was just a baby. She’s enrolled at an early entrance to college program but is still technically a high schooler. Upon graduating she’ll receive her high school diploma plus an associate’s degree so she spends most of her time writing on breaks. She writes really weird dark fantasy and A Pool of Dead Butterflies is her fifth novel!
She’s been hard at work with some pretty heavy revisions, and is taking the new direction (blue) with more enthusiasm and talent than I ever would have dreamed. Seriously, I can’t wait for the world to be able to read her book!
Now that I’m done rambling, here’s a link to all the wishlists if you want to check them out!
Good luck in your Pitch Wars stalking, hopefuls! You’ve got this!!! And like I said, if you have any questions, feel free to hurl them at me.
So, back when I was a wee writer, before this blog was even made and all my posts were on Tumblr, I talked about deep point of view. Pretty much everything I say in that post still holds true. Thought Verbs and Three Easy Steps to Deep POV are still two articles that are invaluable to developing an understanding of deep POV.
But to really get deep POV, we need to go deeper. (ba dum, tss)
Let’s start with what deep POV is. Deep POV is drawing as close to your POV character as you can to give the reader the most immersive experience possible. And wording it like that makes it sound like some magic trick, but that’s what the goal is. You want to create as little wall between your character and your reader. Yes this can work in both third person and first person. No you don’t automatically achieve this by writing in first person. It’s something you consciously do. Unless you’re McTalentpants and already do it.
Now, on the surface level, look at the words you’re using. I used to scoff at filler words. I thought that pretty little roses emerged from my butt as I plopped out new words and that since the sentence I crafted sounded right to me, that it was fine.
As you can guess, I was wrong.
To create as deep an immersion as possible, there are filler words that create distance between your prose and the reader. When you’re thinking throughout the day, do you ever think, “I thought,” “I said,” “I wondered?” No, you just do the thing. And by cutting these words, you enable more room for characterization, world-building, and movement–especially with things like dialog tags. (Watch a movie. Does anyone ever stay still while talking? Your scenes shouldn’t stagnate throughout a conversation, either.) If you want to go all out, here are a couple of giant lists to cut all the filler words. This is my personal list that I always start with:
was, is, even, see, hear, feel, think, just, very, up, down, seem(s), then, that, now, wonder, notice, begins, starts, get, walk, try, only, like, as if, of, really, forward, backward, had, find
Obviously, change tense if you’re in past/present/future/whatever. A couple of other things to watch out for that break reader’s immersion are scene breaks, and italicized thoughts in third person (you shouldn’t be using them in first, period–you’re already narrating from their head, unless you’re implying they never actually think). They’re meant to be used, but with purpose.
All right, now for the part that I didn’t mention in my previous post, and that the posts I link to don’t touch. Let’s go… deeper.
(Please don’t hurt me, I just like puns.)
Every sentence should be infused with your character’s voice. I’m sure you’ve heard this advice before, but rarely have I seen any practical applications of it. Yes, obviously make sure the word choice fits what your character would say. But that doesn’t make it sound like it’s coming from your character’s head.
I swear I’m not all ~hoity toity~ and ~special~ here. Just listing things in a character’s dialog makes it stiff. You might as well be playing a videogame (which I love and have worked in the medium before, but the immersion is different) rather than reading a book. For example, let’s take some action, since that’s the sort of scene that falls into this trap the hardest. I normally sigh when people put in excerpts of their own words as examples, but bear with me:
I kick, and he blocks. I raise my fist again, but he’s faster and gets in the next blow, knocking me down.
It gets the point across. There isn’t much voice, but it’s action, right?
You can do better.
You’re in this character’s head. There’s adrenaline and pain and emotion running through this character’s brain. Every scene, every sentence should have senses, and should have thought. I don’t care about a character that doesn’t care, that doesn’t think–most readers don’t. So you should be using every opportunity you can to show this. Bear with me again as I try to show you what I mean; let’s twist this two different ways.
Sweat drips, stinging in my eyes as I throw my foot forward. He blocks easily, wide grin visible despite my blurred vision. Breath ragged, muscles screaming, jab my fist at his gut–but he blocks it. Again. How am I supposed to prove myself against him? He’s what they say he is: indestructible. His knuckles meet my cheek, the taste and smell of iron flooding my senses. I’m on the ground before I can register falling, dirt caking against my face.
And for a different perspective:
Energy sparks through my body as I kick out–but she catches it. She’s bruised, bloody, half-broken, but she managed to block me. Me. Fire rolls through my veins and I swing, faster than anyone could block.
And yet she knocks my blow off course, nearly keeling over with the force of the blow.
Screw her. Screw this girl who thinks she’s better than me, who thought–
She moves, no flinching for all her wounds, no hesitation as she strikes her fist to my head. Nothing I can do before my world goes black.
Apologies for my trash writing. Now, the same series of events happen in both scenes. In one someone’s giving up, the other someone’s pissed, and hopefully that’s pretty obvious. Now go back and consider that first excerpt. The you get a sense of character through it? But you get any emotion? Any thoughts? I don’t. If we can’t even tell who’s winning, I say that’s a pretty crappy action scene.
I know this is rather nebulous, and it’s hard for me to give you direct advice without seeing your words first. but it’s important, vitally important. Most stories are character driven, and your character can’t drive anything if they aren’t thinking and feeling. So I want you to look at your work, scene by scene, paragraph by paragraph, sentence by sentence, and ask yourself what your character thinks and feels about what’s happening. Is it conveyed in the text, or is it in your head? Be sure you’re combining thinking and action–there are a million reasons behind a smile, but unless you specify that your character is forcing that smile to hide their doubt, or genuinely smiling because they love something, I have no way of knowing. Show me.
Deep POV is all about that immersion, getting your reader as close to the story and the character as possible so they’re invested and right there smack-dab in the story–no matter how uncomfortable it is, or how much more painful it makes the plot twists. The more emotion, the better.
Alright, so I’m here to talk about why I wrote the novel I got into PitchWars with: Summer Thunder. But the story is a little bit more of a how than a why.
I got the inspiration from the story from a few direct sources (Thunder Clatter by Wild Cub, my weird love of thunder storms in the heat of summer, the idea of someone being persecuted for killing a dragon — which I wrote a very depressing short story about, too — and this prompt from a friend: “What if he has no voice, he’s a social outcast, he doesn’t look that good and he’s not that funny?”), but I need a big kick in the butt to start a novel. The only thing I really had to start plotting this story was that tagline you’ve probably seen around if you were following me this time this last year:
She’s on the run for a crime punishable by death: killing a dragon.
So what did I do with that? The most sane thing possible: I wrote a chapter every day for NaNo, and put the entire story in my reader’s hands. I didn’t expect anything legible to come out of it, but thought it would be a challenge to have people give me prompts every day to direct where the story would go, or throw challenges in my way. And boy did people take advantage of that. I’m still scarred from the chapter that I had to work in an ’80’s baby blue tuxedo, duck and pudding, and an allergy to sand. Did I mention that it’s a high fantasy, set in a desert? Yeah.
The site I wrote it on still exists, if you want to check out the fan art — and see proof that I’m totally insane. It was a ton of fun, and stress, and I learned so much. But I was completely prepared to scrap the story at the end.
If it weren’t for a few particularly persistent friends, it’d still be buried in a corner of the internet, a rotting file on my computer. But everyone kept pushing, so I did an insane, month-long revision to enter it in PitchWars, and, well, here I am. Ready to see what comes from the alternate round and have a list of agents to query after that.
I’m forever thankful to Evelyn Skye for being my brilliant mentor, Brenda Drake for being so generous to run this contest, iwriteforapples.com for hosting the alternate round, and everyone else who’s pulling the strings behind this extraordinary contest that’s taught me so much, and brought me to know some absolutely amazing people. (One of those amazing people being Carleen Karanovic, who’s organizing this blog hop!)
Okay, okay, I’m done gushing. Now time to write two Novels for NaNo. (Yay?) Anyone else joining the insanity? Hoping to write your own PitchWars novel?
More “Why I Wrote my Novel” PitchWars Stories!
- Carleen Karanovic: HOPE ON A FEATHER
- Heather Truett: RENASCENCE
- Tracie Martin: WILD IS THE WIND
- Susan Bickford: FRAMED
- Rachel Sarah: RULES FOR RUNNING AWAY
- Amanda Rawson Hill: GRIMM AND BEAR IT
- Charlotte Gruber: CODE OF SILENCE
- Kip Wilson: THE MOST DAZZLING GIRL IN BERLIN
- Mary Ann Nicholson: CALAMITY
- Nikki Roberti: THE TRUTH ABOUT TWO-SHOES
- Anna Patel: EXODUS
- K. A. Reynolds: LE CIRQUE DU LITERATI
- Susan Crispell: WISHES TO NOWHERE
- Ron Walters: THE GOLEM INITIATIVE
- Rosalyn Eves: THE BLOOD ROSE REBELLION
- Ashley Poston: HEART OF IRON
- Mara Rutherford: WINTERSOUL
- Janet Walden-West: Damned If She Do
- Kazul Wolf: SUMMER THUNDER
- S. D. Grimm: WITCHER
- Kelli Newby: THORNVAAL
- Tara Sim: TIMEKEEPER
- Elliah Terry: POCKET FULL OF POPPIES
- Alessa Hinlo: THE HONEST THIEF
- Rachel Horwitz: THE BOOTLEGGER’S BIBLE
- Whitney Taylor: DEFINITIONS OF INDEFINABLE THINGS
- Gina Denny: SANDS OF IMMORTALITY
- Lyra Selene: REVERIE
- Natalie Williamson: SET IN STONE
- Robin Lemke: THE DANCE OF THE PALMS
- Stephanie Herman: CLIFF WITH NO EDGE
- Shannon Cooley: A FROG, A WHISTLE, AND A VIAL OF SAND
- Ruth Anne Snow: THE GIRLS OF MARCH
- Elizabeth Dimit: PHOEBE FRANZ’S GUIDE TO PASSPORTS, PAGEANTS, & PARENTAL DISASTERS
- Gwen C. Katz: AMONG THE RED STARS
- Jennifer Hawkins: FALSE START
- Gina Denny: SANDS OF IMMORTALITY
- Natasha M. Heck: FOLLOW THE MOON
- Esher Hogan – Walking After Midnight
- D.A. Mages: THE MEMORY OF OBJECTS
So as a a few of you (and anyone who follows me on Twitter), know, I’ve entered PitchWars! And so to help the mentors get to know us possible-mentees while they stalk applicants, there’ve been bios written by the mentees popping up, now gathered over here. And, well, why not join in
other than being horrible socially awkward?
I live in the absolute middle of nowhere in upstate/not-quite-western New York. Proof? I have chickens, sheep, three dogs, many cats (one of which is mine and lovingly known as Perv cat), and an evil bunny, with not a soul complaining about all the noise.
While I’m not hanging out in that insane asylum, I work as a baker at a four-diamond restaurant. I started off as a chef, having worked at a diner, another fine dining place, had a stint at the CIA – the other CIA – and finally settled at this place. I have to get up at 2am to go to work, so I tend to be pretty insane.
Not that I wasn’t insane to begin with.
Despite being a book, video game, and kinda-comic addict my whole life, I actually didn’t start writing as a serious hobby until I was eighteen. Before that I was a swimming jock. Then I had the swine flu for a ridiculously intense six months that left me with asthma for a year, and constant sinus pain and infections that I still have. I pretty much lost all that I’d worked for. So while I was stuck in bed watching too much anime, I wrote my first novel.
I’m a totally fantasy addict, writing all across the board of YA/occasionally NA fantasy, and sometimes sticking my nose into other spec genres. I have a project in the works with Villipede Press, but not too much else to brag about (maybe other than the silly prompt challenge… which I should be writing right now).
That’s it! All I have to share about boring old me.